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I'll admit someone else posted this as a note and I was going to skim it. Then you caught me with a line of dialogue and I finished the whole thing. This is really good piece. It's not what I'd call my style but the dialogue's fantastic and you are a very good writer. Congrats on this being pubbed where you mentioned.

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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. And thanks for commenting. It's always nice to hear people's reactions.

What was the line of dialogue that caught you?

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Honestly, the dialogue in general was just great. I went back from where I'd skimmed and read the whole thing. From here I'd have to go back to pick out a particular line, and I may not even remember it (Weapons Grade ADHD) but the story is solid. And I'm saying that as a reader and, uhh, professional reader? (I'm a freelance editor. And I'm hard to impress by any metric, so, bravo.)

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I always enjoy your stories. But this one really hit home. I realized that, alas, I’m not special at all. I have never managed to pee accurately standing up. 😅. Loved it

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Haha, well, to be fair, as the story suggests, most men haven't either 😄

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